Subject: comments on 1/2/00 draft Resent-Date: Tue, 04 Jan 2000 10:07:18 -0500 Resent-From: Geoffrey Fox Resent-To: p_gcf@npac.syr.edu Date: Mon, 3 Jan 100 13:01:17 -0500 (EST) From: lacher@nu.cs.fsu.edu (Chris Lacher) To: gcf@npac.syr.edu CC: joe@erc.msstate.edu (Joe Thompson), wbrown@ccaix.jsums.edu (Willie Brown), stoeckli@cis.famu.edu (Dr. Sara Stoecklin), clacher@oddl.fsu.edu (Chris Lacher), lacher@nu.cs.fsu.edu (Chris Lacher), pdragovitsch@oddl.fsu.edu Great job everybody! I have a few typographical errors to suggest: Multiple locations: "internet" should be consistently capitalized ("Internet") project summary: bullet 2: "environments" should be singular paragraph 2: sentence 2: delete comma after "internet" in second sentence. Also cap "internet". sentence 4: case mismatch between "system" and "exist". section 1: paragraph 2: sentence 3-: "internet based curriculum" should be plural (also cap "internet") sentence 2-: should read: "FSU Office for Distribited and Distance Learning (ODDL)" notes: "for" not "of"; "Distributed" before "Distance" paragraph 3: sentence 1: "curriculum" should be plural paragraph 4: sentence 1-: comma after "However" paragraph 5: sentence 1-: comma after "Further" section 3: paragraph 1: sentence 1: replace "next" millenium with "new" millenium sentence 2: insert "is" between "principle" and "to" paragraph 2: sentence 2: comma after "Further" section 6: paragraph 4: sentence 1: "...whether residential and distance..." -- replace "and" with "or" --- Please send final version! Thanks, --Chris Lacher ====================================================================== Department of Computer Science Phone: 850/644-0057 205-A Love Building Fax: 850/644-0058 Florida State University Email: lacher@cs.fsu.edu Tallahassee, FL 32306-4530 http://www.cs.fsu.edu/~lacher ---------------------------------------------------------------------- Office for Distributed and Distance Learning Phone: 850/645-6335 C-3505 University Center Fax: 850/644-5803 Florida State University Email: clacher@oddl.fsu.edu Tallahassee, FL 32306-2540 http://www.oddl.fsu.edu/~clacher ======================================================================