Replied: Wed, 01 Jan 2003 22:04:45 -0500 Replied: gcf Replied: Malcolm Atkinson Replied: gcf@indiana.edu Replied: editing@laserwords.com Replied: Tony Hey Return-Path: mpa@dcs.gla.ac.uk Delivery-Date: Wed Jan 1 15:41:11 2003 Return-Path: Received: from round.uits.indiana.edu (round.uits.indiana.edu [129.79.1.72]) by grids.ucs.indiana.edu (8.10.2+Sun/8.10.2) with ESMTP id h01Kf9N28496 for ; Wed, 1 Jan 2003 15:41:09 -0500 (EST) Received: from dundee.dcs.gla.ac.uk (dundee.dcs.gla.ac.uk [130.209.242.163]) by round.uits.indiana.edu (8.12.1/8.12.1/IUPO) with ESMTP id h01Kh8qd015309 for ; Wed, 1 Jan 2003 15:43:08 -0500 (EST) Received: from dialin2 ([130.209.240.172] helo=OBERON.dcs.gla.ac.uk) by dundee.dcs.gla.ac.uk with asmtp (SSLv3:DES-CBC3-SHA:168) (Exim 4.04) id 18Tpdq-00023o-00; Wed, 01 Jan 2003 20:39:07 +0000 Message-Id: <5.1.0.14.0.20030101194821.058f8990@dundee.dcs.gla.ac.uk> X-Sender: mpa@dundee.dcs.gla.ac.uk X-Mailer: QUALCOMM Windows Eudora Version 5.1 Date: Wed, 01 Jan 2003 20:26:55 +0000 To: gcf@indiana.edu, Malcolm Atkinson , editing@laserwords.com From: Malcolm Atkinson Subject: Re: Santa Claus stuffing his sledge with Grid Book proofs? Cc: Tony Hey In-Reply-To: <3E086FCB.403@grids.ucs.indiana.edu> Mime-Version: 1.0 Content-Type: text/html; charset="us-ascii" Content-Length: 3970 Sorry I am so late. This is a shot at typing in what I decided on the flight to HRO in the hope of sending it before taking off to Bangkok.

Malcolm

Chapter 7 edits

Change the title to:
Rationale for choosing the open Grid services architecture

page 197 Sec. 7.1 line -1
delete "service data elements"
from
Grid service data elements service data
elements (SDE).

page 199 sec. 7.3 line 2 delete "a" to read:
and was a major and welcome influence. OGSA is the product of combining the flexible,

sec. 7.3 line 5
replace "would" with "will"
to read
that significant changes to OGSA’s definition will have occurred by the time this chapter

page 200 line 7
agree with editor's suggestion spell out API to read
invoked through a declared Application Programming Interface, usually over a network,

page 200 sec. 7.3.2 line 1
agree with editor's suggestion.
to read
As other chapters describe OGSA (see Chapter 8), it receives only minimal description

page 201 line 3 replace "but" with "and"
to read
be described, and these may be adopted for wider use in forthcoming standards. This

line 4
agree with editor's suggestion
to read
extended version of WSDL is called Grid Services Description Language (GSDL).

page 201 line -1
delete "the" to read
pioneers and the major software companies. This is essential for achieving widely

page 202
I accept the combination of two sentences suggested by the editor.
to read
and encapsulated services that would also benefit scientists if we share infrastructure, as

page 206 sec. 7.8 para 3 line 2
plural Systems
to read
usually stored in standard Database Management Systems (DBMS), which is often managed

page 210 last bullet in list
I agree with the deletion proposed.

page 211 first bullet plural components
to read
It assists in the dynamic composition of components and makes it more likely that tools

last two lines before the Acknowledgements
insert "applications", clarify the two "their"s
should read
effective WS and effective GS, it should invest effort in developing applications using these new technologies
and use that experience to influence the design and ensure the compatibility of these foundation technologies.

reference 3, the required initial is D

reference 4, publication year is 2000

reference 5, city Palo Alto

reference 6, year is 2000

reference 13 does not have a page number or volume number

reference 16, can't do this until I can get at a web browser to look at SC2001 web site

reference 23, this author prefers not to use another initial, but it is C.

reference 30, I need access to the web to answer this

reference 31, the location is correct

This concludes my suggested changes:#

At 09:31 24/12/2002 -0500, Geoffrey Fox wrote:

I am sorry to bug you but I believe your proof edits are still missing
and we have all the other chapters
I wonder if you could look at this
Thank you

I apologize if you have sent them in

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